Marriage Aftermath By BLACKCHERRY

Author : BLACKCHERRY
Title : Marriage Aftermath
Link : http://www.winglin.net/fanfic/blackC001/
Status : Completed
Reviewer : Hidayah @ Priss-toHill

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Title : 5/5

The title is quite good..I think it catches the readers to read your story..Especially you put the word 'aftermath'..Wow!When first I got this review request,I feel so surprised.Well done!

Forewords : 9/10

It is too short..But straight to the point.

Plot : 15/20

There are many of marriage stories out there but I love yours the most.It attracts me to read more actually.

Originality : 8/10

Like I said on the plot section,there are many of marriage dramas/movies out there.So it's not crative anymore.

Style of Your Writing : 15/15

Your writing was really detailed.I bet that you must be exprienced in writing rated stories.I have read many of rated stories.But yours is the best one.Seriously I said.

Spelling, Grammar, and Punctuation : 10/15

I does not saw many mistakes..Here it is:Jaejoong and BoA are a ‘JUST MARRY’ couple. This story is told in a 3rd person perspective (BoA) One day, Jaejoong’s mother came over and started to feel disapprove by BoA’s behavior as her daughter-in-law. Jaejoong is stuck in the middle, especially when his mother start pressuring the ‘JUST MARRY’ to… It should be:Jaejoong and BoA are a ‘JUST MARRIED’ couple. This story is told in a 1st person perspective (BoA) One day, Jaejoong’s mother came over and started to feel disapprove by BoA’s behavior as her daughter-in-law. Jaejoong is stuck in the middle, especially when his mother start pressuring the ‘JUST MARRIED’ to…

Descriptions and Word Choice : 8/10

I think it's quite good..Well done..

Appearance (Poster and Background) : 10/10

OMG!I'm totally love the poster & background!It's clean and neat..Besides,I love white & green!But the color doesn't suit with the story itself and the title ( aftermath)

Creativity and Bonus : 5/5

Uhm..Well,I give you 5 marks for this because you have put your efforts in this story!The rated part is really good.It's totally detailed.Since this is the first time review a rated story,so yeah.I think this is good!Keep up the good job!

Total: 85 / 100