tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-90846885779078381832011-07-08T06:02:41.703-07:00Priss-toHillhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/04519708849925110790noreply@blogger.comBlogger11100tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-9084688577907838183.post-18324231738047878012009-06-06T02:23:00.000-07:002009-06-06T02:34:44.024-07:00Author : BLACKCHERRY<br />Title : Marriage Aftermath<br />Link : <a href="http://www.winglin.net/fanfic/blackC001/">http://www.winglin.net/fanfic/blackC001/</a><br />Status : Completed<br />Reviewer : Hidayah @ Priss-toHill<br /><br />----------------------------------------<br /><br />Title : 5/5<br /><br />The title is quite good..I think it catches the readers to read your story..Especially you put the word 'aftermath'..Wow!When first I got this review request,I feel so surprised.Well done!<br /><br />Forewords : 9/10<br /><br />It is too short..But straight to the point.<br /><br />Plot : 15/20<br /><br />There are many of marriage stories out there but I love yours the most.It attracts me to read more actually.<br /><br />Originality : 8/10<br /><br />Like I said on the plot section,there are many of marriage dramas/movies out there.So it's not crative anymore.<br /><br />Style of Your Writing : 15/15<br /><br />Your writing was really detailed.I bet that you must be exprienced in writing rated stories.I have read many of rated stories.But yours is the best one.Seriously I said.<br /><br />Spelling, Grammar, and Punctuation : 10/15<br /><br />I does not saw many mistakes..Here it is:Jaejoong and BoA are a ‘JUST MARRY’ couple. This story is told in a 3rd person perspective (BoA) One day, Jaejoong’s mother came over and started to feel disapprove by BoA’s behavior as her daughter-in-law. Jaejoong is stuck in the middle, especially when his mother start pressuring the ‘JUST MARRY’ to… It should be:Jaejoong and BoA are a ‘JUST MARRIED’ couple. This story is told in a 1st person perspective (BoA) One day, Jaejoong’s mother came over and started to feel disapprove by BoA’s behavior as her daughter-in-law. Jaejoong is stuck in the middle, especially when his mother start pressuring the ‘JUST MARRIED’ to…<br /><br />Descriptions and Word Choice : 8/10<br /><br />I think it's quite good..Well done..<br /><br />Appearance (Poster and Background) : 10/10<br /><br />OMG!I'm totally love the poster &amp; background!It's clean and neat..Besides,I love white &amp; green!But the color doesn't suit with the story itself and the title ( aftermath)<br /><br />Creativity and Bonus : 5/5<br /><br />Uhm..Well,I give you 5 marks for this because you have put your efforts in this story!The rated part is really good.It's totally detailed.Since this is the first time review a rated story,so yeah.I think this is good!Keep up the good job!<br /><br />Total: 85 / 100<div class="blogger-post-footer"><img width='1' height='1' src='https://blogger.googleusercontent.com/tracker/9084688577907838183-1832423173804787801?l=elnabella.blogspot.com' alt='' /></div>Priss-toHillhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/04519708849925110790noreply@blogger.com0